Happy Poetry Friday, everyone! Kate Messner‘s summer writing camp is in full swing, and although I haven’t been diligent about writing, I did appreciate the tips shared in Kate’s conversation with Linda Urban about revision. My writing has been spotty at best over the past few years, but I did find an old poem to revisit and revise. You can read the original poem here.
Here is the new version:
Moonbow At the Edge of the World
Hawaii Volcanoes National Park
When the moon blooms full and golden
in twilight’s indigo sky,
clamber up
a shadowy path
that weaves between bare, black rocks.
At the pinnacle,
gaze out over the crater
filled with billowy, pillowy
fog.
Watch, as a watercolor prism
emerges,
its radiant ribbons
of red and orange,
green and violet,
arcing over the mist,
taking your breath away.
A bridge to fairyland beckons.
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“A bridge to fairyland beckons” is a lovely ending. Thanks for the Messner/Urban revision tips link. I will check it out.
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I love pillowy billowy fog. So fun to say.
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I love the word “clamber” — such a great verb for spotting a bridge to fairyland!
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